<Pony><Melodic/harmony><original> Adenosine

[Guthey]

https://soundcloud.com/guthey/newthing

Okay, so I was hoping to get some actual feedback on this, I passed this by two other people, and they pretty much told me what was up about it, how it flowed, what was weird and what wasn't, and just overall how they felt about it.
What I'm hoping for now is for some criticism and some advice on this, what you guys think about, what I could possibly do, what sounds weird, or just whether you feel it's in harmony or not.
I am perfectly fine with harsh, honest answers, I know criticism and how it goes, so if you must be harsh, go right ahead, I will not be butthurt.
So if you could just tell me what you think and give me advice that would be great!

tl;dr- you give me advice and criticism and we all be happy !

[Callenby]

Hi!

The mixing is very strange. What I mean by that is that it's muddled. The melody is hard to distinguish because the harmony is so amplified, especially after the 1:30 mark. Try bringing out the melody more. After all, the whole idea is that the harmony is supporting the melody, not the other way around.

The bass part I found a little distracting. It didn't feel to me like there was a whole lot of consistency in it, like it was unsure what its role was (if that makes sense at all). It's perfectly fine to have a role evolve over time but this just changed back and forth.

It's a tad on the repetitive side, even though it's only two minutes long. See what you can do to vary things more like changing keys or using a more diverse chord progression.

Similar to what I've already said, I would recommend also thinking some more about the overall structure of the song. "Melodic/harmony" doesn't tell me a whole lot about what genre you intend this to be in. Melodies and harmonies are so fundamental to music that they transcend genre. Knowing exactly what sort of style and context you're working in can really help provide form and focus (if you didn't already know that).

I hope some of that has helped wasn't too harsh!