by Navron » 01 Oct 2012 14:32
Well, for one, it usually takes more than a few hours for somebody to give feedback, but since you seem impatient and want feedback now, I'll shorten it up to a few sentences.
- There is no melody.
- The sound doesn't feel like it's going anywhere.
- The post white-noise segment doesn't match the same key as the original riff.
- Why isn't the post white-noise segment a drop? Seems to be leading into a drop, that leads into another lead into a drop.
- White noise is overused.
- The bass drum and snare need a lot of work.
I don't feel a structure to the song. It doesn't seem to have a story to it, the organization confuses me, and the mixing is bad. All in all it seems more like, "Hey, this riff sounds cool, let's add some drums and random sound effects."
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