[non-pony][piano][original] An Autumn Song

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[non-pony][piano][original] An Autumn Song

Postby Conduit » 30 Sep 2013 21:05

Made this in like three hours tonight, it has a key change on every sixth bar, and is in 4/4 for the most part, although there is a 3/4 section. Critique would be cool, but its not a serious piece so just enjoy it I guess.

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Re: [non-pony][piano][original] An Autumn Song

Postby Esttel » 30 Sep 2013 21:39

It's been a while since I've heard a soothing piano song. It's really good as it is, and the key changes spice it up nicely. Nice job!
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Re: [non-pony][piano][original] An Autumn Song

Postby Conduit » 01 Oct 2013 08:23

Glad you liked it! I'll probably go in and play with some of the velocity settings, and tone down the reverb a bit before I properly release it.
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Re: [non-pony][piano][original] An Autumn Song

Postby Callenby » 04 Oct 2013 23:47

I wanted to write this sooner but I had jury duty and then my internet crashed a hell of a lot :(

I like what you have so far (is that Emotional Piano I hear?). It makes me wish I could compose something that quickly.

The flow between keys was pretty seamless; I almost couldn't tell that it had happened. Nice work!

Changing keys that every sixth bar is a neat concept, but I think this might benefit from a bit more repetition, particularly within in the first minute and a half's worth of material. The piece is only a couple minutes long and could definitely end up being longer without becoming tiresome, I feel, especially if you varied the accompaniment pattern a little more. Arpeggios and solid chords are perfectly fine but in general be careful not to rely too heavily on them.

In a similar vein, your B section could certainly be longer (actually, so could A' but I'm thinking mainly B). Right now the section is so short that it's almost like 3/4 is used as an affectation rather than a statement of its own, if that makes any sense. You use the "oom pah pah" harmonic style so briefly that it seemed like it was wanting to become a full-fledged waltz. That might just be my interpretation, however, as I'm pretty obsessed with waltz music.

See if you can't edit the dynamics around to push some more emotion out of this even though it's not supposed to be serious. I don't have any specific spots in mind. Just experiment with crescendos, decrescendos and sudden jumps in volume. Just doing that can add a surprising amount of emotion to something (it's probably what makes a lot of minimalist music listenable at all).

Also, towards the end I think a more gradual fade into, say, pianissimo would sound nice. Currently it's a little on the abrupt side, but it's not a huge deal.

But, yeah, you've done a great job overall. Kudos!
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Re: [non-pony][piano][original] An Autumn Song

Postby Conduit » 05 Oct 2013 00:15

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Thanks man, I agree with every one of your points. The reason it's so short, and varies so often was because I was getting frustrated with being stuck in on spot on a few other songs, and decided to pump this one out to try to work past that creative block. The main idea I was running with was a sense of change, and I think I'll go back and play with velocities to try to bring that out more. However I don't think I'll change the length since really just was just a fun excercise and a way for me to let out all the need to write music I hadn't been able to for the last few days. I'm on my phone so sorry for the short reply and any stupid typos.

Edit: Yeah that's emotional pianos. Nice ear!
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Re: [non-pony][piano][original] An Autumn Song

Postby Conduit » 12 Oct 2013 17:58



Played with dynamics and uploaded to YouTube.
Also made a after effects thing for the first time in my life. cool!
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