[WIP][House][non-pony]LutariFan - Paradise

[LutariFan]

Hello!

I have made this song called Paradise, and myself I'm pretty content with it. But seeing as I am a pretty new musician, there will be something others know and I don't, or something I just forgot. Anyway, one thing I've learned is it's always good to let somepony else review your song/written project/anything.

So, yea, feedback would be appreciated

https://soundcloud.com/lutarifan/lutarifan-paradise

[LutariFan]

Bump

[prozeyic]

I like some of the sounds you used, pretty interesting. And it's fairly pleasant to listen to, not too harsh on the ears.

Although the arrangement of the song is lacking. The melody isn't very interesting and it doesn't seem like anything changes in the second climax.

Overall it seems like you're doing pretty well with the technical side of things but are lacking in the song writing itself. I suggest you study some of the artists that you are trying to sound like and analyse how the song progresses.

Just my 2 cents.

[hackd]

You gotta bring that bass up!

I would also throw in some variation on the drumline and maybe some auxillary percussion as well.

[LutariFan]

Thanks for the replies!

I will probably change up the melody a bit. I find it a bit hard to make melodies with chords only, but I'll do my best to make it more interesting

And yes, I'm not that content with the drumline yet, so changes to that will be made.