Crystal fair metal/rock version

[Joaftheloaf]

A metal version of this song I wrote, what do you guys think?

[Kiwibomb]

Good. Next step: real guitar and all that stuff. See if you can make it happen!

[MudPony]

The bit from 10s to 30s felt a bit off. Guess I'm more used to acoustic intro into full band mode or else a gradual addition of instruments into the mix. Or it might just be the sound of the synth, that it goes from a guitar to an obviously synth sound, to an electric guitar sound.

Wonder if maybe it should metal up at the 10s mark, rather than waiting the extra 20s. Or maybe keep the acoustic guitar going as the main focus for the first 30s, adding a bass to support it at the 10s mark.

Overall, liked it though. Wouldn't mind an extended version, one that tacks a bit of mosh and/or headbang worthy potential onto the current end, followed by another dose of the refrain.

[Joaftheloaf]

Good. Next step: real guitar and all that stuff. See if you can make it happen!

Haha finally, you're the first person to catch (i think) that I didn't play any of the instruments. I wrote it completely in guitar pro. It's amazing how realistic the instruments sound, but yeah I would love to use my guitar and record it, but my guitar sounds like crap and I lack a good recording program to record (i'm poor). If you have any suggestions how to make my guitar sound good and find a good cheap recording program, i'm all ears. I also have $185 to spend for recording gear. Thanks!