<Nonpon><Original><Acoustic> Blind

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<Nonpon><Original><Acoustic> Blind

Postby Jokeblue » 30 Aug 2015 01:51

Made a new song! Yaaaaaay.

Please tell me what you think :3



https://soundcloud.com/jeremyjokeblue/blind


Spoiler Lyrics:
Slowly the artist dips his brush
Into the living dye
To bring his love to life

World washed in sunlight starts to fade
Pervading misery
In scenes that always bleed

The clouds he paints are turning grey
Painting a tragedy
He wished he couldn’t see

The lives in pain distressed and crying out in vain
He paints it anyway
It’s just another day

How did we become so blind to these colours we find in life?

Maybe the worlds not as bright as I thought
Maybe it’s just my eyes
Dulling the ache expertly we become
Desensitized, desensitized

We turn away when roses wilt and dry
No water to revive
I wish we weren’t so cursed and colour-blind
Nescient to our pallor, don’t want to see that we are

Blinded to the colours in…



(Nescient = “Lacking knowledge, Ignorant")
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New song! - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n4lFqkuY5Fg
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Re: <Nonpon><Original><Acoustic> Blind

Postby Jokeblue » 22 Sep 2015 21:15

Thanks so much for the feedback! I have to do a full length version of this for uni which will have a bit broader instrumentation. The midi sound is probably due to my over editing of acoustic guitar and treating them like a distorted one which would have screwed with the natural sound of an acoustic.

On note of vocals, I really don't have a lot of experience with mixing/producing vocals and i'm never really sure what should be done in that regard. I feel like because i'm not 100% comfortable with my own voice yet that I kinda went a bit heavy on the delay and stuff to try and compensate for personal feelings of not thinking I actually sound any good, so means a lot to have had positive responses from you and friends on fb in regards to it.

I'll definitely take all this into consideration as I work on the full length version, thanks for taking the time to listen and give some criticism :3
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