Pinkie Storm

[Crusader]

Something old and kinda rushed, but i released it anyway
https://soundcloud.com/crusaderr/pinkie-storm

[Genkar]

Your mix is a bit loud, I'd recommend mixing down further. There's too much reverb on those drums. The melody doesn't feel like it fits that well with the bassline, but I guess it works. A lot of it is pretty repetitive, try switching up the chords occasionally. Okay, make the buildup clearer when it starts, because I didn't even know it was a buildup at first. Try adding like, a white noise sweep or something. The drop is kind of sloppy, and it doesn't really hit hard enough. Add heavier subs underneath. It almost feels like you tried to make the drop a continuation of the section before it, which I wouldn't really recommend. And that outro is weak.

Overall, the concept of it is decent, but the two main things that need a lot of work are your mixing, and making your changes stand out more. The way everything is, you kind of have the same pattern playing in the back the whole time, and everything feels like it's all one big continuation of what came before it. Here's some advice I was given:
"When you shift into any kind of drop section, you first need some sense of build-up, then you need to divorce the B section from the A section."

And the other main thing, the mixing, I hear a lot of clipping through the whole song, and it could be a lot better if you had a good mix. A good mixing technique that I'd suggest; mix all the individual mixer tracks down pretty far, so that the whole thing is at about -6dB. That'll give you some headroom to work with. Then you can usually just compress the master, and you're usually pretty good from there. Also, make sure you're EQing everything, the frequencies are a bit of a mess through the song.

Keep working at it though, I'd love to see some of the stuff you could do after a bit of practice.