<Original><Pony> I'm Not a Nightmare

[AerieFlew]

Well. This is another Luna song... a bit different from the last one.
Tis from her point of view.
I really like the words this time at least...
I would LOVE feedback PLEASE

You don't know the power, of jealousy...
When your sister's talents are heard at the highest intensity.
I never meant to hurt you, never thought I'd try,
But the words my sister held over me, made Luna a disguise.

I beg for your forgiveness, I'm not truly Nightmare Moon,
Spent an eternity in the dark, harmony brought me back to you.
My subjects, I swear to you, the sun will always rise,
Just remember the moon is there, to keep you in the light.

My heart is filled with regret, from becoming a pain to you.
I'll right the wrongs the darker mare, spent time making true.
Celestia's now by my side to keep me whom I am,
No longer filled by spiteful thoughts, but a princess to save the land...
http://soundcloud.com/songofaeire/im-not-a-nightmare

[Facade]

AWESOME ^.^!!!

[AerieFlew]

Hunnie bunnie thank you greatly :3 hehe

[MasterOfRegret]

Once again, I think their was too much effect on your voice, but I know it's because you need a new microphone!
And the youtube didn't work.


But I clap slowly at the lyrics and song in general. *clap* *clap* *clap*

[AerieFlew]

Oh well thank you.
Sorry for the effect. Honestly I could probably leave it out but without the reverb I don't like my voice. It's too... Flat. I guess. Next song I won't use any, promise.
I'm glad you liked the lyrics, thank you very much.

[Freewave]

Keep working on the production aspects if you have the means. combining vocal takes. recording paino and vocals seperately. fixing any mistakes in a take (voal pitch in a few, a few missed notes), better mic-ing etc will help you sound better overall then a single attempt. For a single shot live recording this is good overall but always has room for improvement.

[AerieFlew]

Well thank you for the advice
I'm really working on it hehe...

[SeventhElement]

I like what you have so far! Seriously do keep it up. Once you get a better mic, please oh please re-record an acapella


(As far as complaints go they have already been stated)

[AerieFlew]

I'll for sure do that, thank you.

[AerieFlew]

I'm so disappointed by this one xP
Gese.
It got a dislike. 75% like it. Only four votes.
Fail for me.

[MiuMiuChuu]

Personally, I love the lyrics. Pictures a very brave and accepting Luna, which I always picture how Luna is like after her come back.
For the vocalizing itself:
First, I think you should work on your pitching. I can see where you're trying to take the notes, but it still feels a bit scattered with the way you sing it. My suggestion is, first you must know where your vocal ranges are and then suit your composing so it can fits the range you can sing.
Secondly, try master your breath as it also helps you to take your voice to the exact note you want to sing. Your voice still sound a little faint, and considering the lyrics have quite syllables per part, this can give you trouble. Don't be afraid to pull more power in your singing.

Keep composing and singing, Aerie. <3

[AerieFlew]

Thank you Miu
I'm gonna work on this a lot, lots of issues I guess.

[SeventhElement]

If you can polish this I'd totally be down to remix this. I mean, if that's ok with you...

[AerieFlew]

Oooo that would be fine with me... Hmmm. I will work on the whole polishing thing soon.

XP I feel bad cause like... I have a bunch of things I need to record but I've been sick and busy and now my throat is swollen and I really have to get it all done and people are waiting on me and I feel bad ._.

[Freewave]

Well biggest issue is the 4 votes. I can always count on 1 person disliking a track but if that's 3 or 20 or 75 people liking it is a big difference. As I said before work on the overall quality of the production as the quick and easy recording won't result you in the more time consuming one. Consider this a WIP before you consider it finished and work on getting better results with getting flaws ironed out.