Feedback needed please.

[UnderpΩny]

I think I need to build the tension more. What do you think? And do you have any suggestions as to how? Any other feedback would be much appreciated as well.

http://soundcloud.com/underg-d/early-wip1

[TaisiKP]

You make me jelly every time you post a WIP...

[TaisiKP]

And yes, the tension feels like it could've been built up more. At least to me.

[UnderpΩny]

I have a few ideas to try out actually. And a fill to add. I hope somebrony else gives me feedback too.